Sad But Still Lonely (chapter 1)

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    Sad But Still Lonely (chapter 1)

    Post by Dark Pearl on Sun Feb 07 2010, 16:33

    " A sad day for us,huh,sis. Raven's little sister named Nikendra said.

    "Yes, it is little sis." Raven said.

    "Why did steve die again." Nikendra said

    "He died because he had a heartattack." Raven said.

    "Ohh,will goodnight,big sis. Nikendra said.


    The next day at school," I feel like I didn't have ant friends.Darrian-san seems to be avoiding me. I wonder." raven said in her thoughts. " Lets look back at page 92 for Review." Mrs. marshall said to the class. " oh great now I have to stay awake for the time being. Raven said.

    After Mrs. Marshall's class, it was time for science class. "well, lets see how my day goes." Raven said; Until a note was placed on her desk. She looked up and saw her ex-boyfriend, Darrian walking away. " I wonder what he wants." raven said again as she opened the note.


    Note says: Are you okay? am sorry for your lost. and hope for you and....... nvm am sorry for your lost.

    " hmm, I wonder."Raven said without writing back on the note.


    In the afternoon around the time for social studies class. "see stars". Raven's friend named , Avery said. "Man, shut the h*ll up". Raven said. "I'm ready to go home." Raven said again. "Please realse students for Bus 231, thats for Bus 231." theacconments speaker said. "D**n, I hate thing." Avery said.


    well, people I was to lazy to go on with this story but be ready for chapter 2.


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    Re: Sad But Still Lonely (chapter 1)

    Post by Juhnari on Sun Feb 07 2010, 17:46

    wow! whens chapter 2! can't wait. plus lazy is bad.
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    Re: Sad But Still Lonely (chapter 1)

    Post by NightKitsuneQ on Sun Feb 07 2010, 19:57

    very good!! cant wait for chpt2
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    Re: Sad But Still Lonely (chapter 1)

    Post by Toshii on Sun Feb 07 2010, 22:49

    nice~ can't wait for chappy 2~ :3
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    Re: Sad But Still Lonely (chapter 1)

    Post by UreshiiQ on Mon Feb 08 2010, 03:05

    Nice! ^_^ You might wanna check your grammer, though :O
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    Re: Sad But Still Lonely (chapter 1)

    Post by Dark Pearl on Mon Feb 08 2010, 09:02

    thanks I'm glad you all like the story. and i'll go back and check it later on.
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    Re: Sad But Still Lonely (chapter 1)

    Post by Nikpl on Wed Feb 10 2010, 21:12

    check grammer pearl-chan
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    Re: Sad But Still Lonely (chapter 1)

    Post by Dark Pearl on Wed Feb 10 2010, 21:48

    fine and done I checked my grammer
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    Re: Sad But Still Lonely (chapter 1)

    Post by NightKitsuneQ on Wed Feb 10 2010, 23:36

    heh ^_^

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