Hearts and Daggers- Chapter 1: Night at the Uzumaki dorm

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    Hearts and Daggers- Chapter 1: Night at the Uzumaki dorm

    Post by Mizuko Karasashi on Thu Oct 04 2007, 21:01

    Thunder. Lightning. The soft pitter patter of
    the rain on the window sill. As soothing as it was, it failed to lull
    Sakura into slumber. She pulled the sheets off her, and placed her feet
    on the floor. The wood floor was cold, but she didn't mind it. She was
    a bit hot under the covers. Repeated dreams of Sasuke haunted her out
    of her sleep every time she fell into it. Why... She pondered,
    grabbing a picture off of her bed-side table. She stared into the
    picture, the very one that each of team 7 had in their dorms. Naruto
    smiled his normal toothy grin, Sakura smiled cutely, and Sasuke had a
    sour look on his face. He clearly didn't want to be there. Sakura
    stared at it, and placed it back on her table. Why would he run off with Orochimaru? She
    slid off the bed, and made her way through the darkness, and to her
    window. Moonlight poured into the room as she pulled the blinds up. The
    stars shined brightly over Konoha. She glanced at the clock on the wall
    that seperated her from her kitchen.

    2:45 AM

    She
    sighed, and flicked on a light. Immediately shielding her eyes from the
    blinding light, she leaned against the wall, and heaved a sigh. Letting
    her eyes adjust to the light, she opened her cabinet, and reached for a
    can of soup, when her hand was stopped by something else. She wrapped
    her hands around it, and removed it from it's place. A pack of
    microwavable Ramen sat in her hand. Chicken Flavor as the package read. She smiled, and sat down at her table. I remember... Naruto gave this to me on our last date... She chuckled a bit. Naruto never knows the right gift to give a woman... that guy... She
    placed the package down, and walked towards the door. She opened it,
    and stepped out into the stormy night. Her dorm was on the second story. She
    lived nearest to Kiba and Naruto. She glanced down the walkway, and
    noticed something peculiar. There was a light on in Naruto's dorm.
    Sakura returned to her room, pulled on some clothes, and began the
    short walk to Naruto's dorm in the light drizzle. She finally arrived at the door, and
    knocked. No answer. She knocked again, and finally, the locks on the
    door slid loose, and the door opened, spilling light upon Sakura's
    form.

    Naruto was surprisingly, fully clothed just as Sakura
    was. The smell of Ramen flooded Sakura's senses, and she immediately
    knew that the Jinchuriki was up for a late night snack. Naruto smiled.
    "Sakura-chan!" He said, with a tone of surprise. She smiled sweetly.
    "Hey Naruto. Up late? Mind if I come in?" Naruto stepped aside. "Not at
    all, come in!" She stepped inside, and noticed a small dog curled up on
    the couch. She turned her head to see Kiba sitting at the table. He was
    also fully dressed, and was sitting in front of a steaming bowl of
    Ramen, along with some playing cards. "Hey Sakura. Up late?" Sakura
    smiled and looked back to Naruto. "What is this, a party?" Naruto
    scratched his head. "Well, I couldn't sleep, and neither could Kiba.
    Have a seat, I'll cook up another bowl of Ramen!" For some reason that
    sounded wonderful. I really do feel like a good bowl of Ramen. "Sounds
    wonderful!" she finally replied, taking a seat at the dinner table.
    Kiba held card. "Want to play some poker?" Sakura waved a hand. "No
    thanks. I never really learned how to play that anyways."

    Kiba
    placed two cards near Naruto's bowl of Ramen. "Suit yourself. We got
    money on this." Sakura rolled her eyes. "Men..." she muttered, as the
    'DING' sound of a finished bowl of Ramen rang out through the room.
    Naruto grabbed a dish-cloth, and carefully picked up the bowl of
    noodles. Placing it in front of Sakura, he slid into his seat, and
    placed a pair of chopsticks into his bowl, and smiled brightly. The
    room was silent, as all three of them alurped down the Ramen. Naruto
    was of course the first to finish, and he stood up, and walked across
    the room, fiddling with some things in the cupboard. "Kiba, you want
    another round?" He asked, holding another package. Kiba shook his head.
    "Nah, I should actually be heading home. I have to get at least some
    sleep tonight." Naruto nodded. "Alright then, see you tomorrow." Kiba
    nodded. "Kikara! Lets go!" The puppy lifted it's head from the couch,
    and yawned. Kiba had been taking care of his little cousin's dog while
    she was away. The puppy dropped to the floor, and pranced out the door,
    as Kiba held it open. "Akamaru was never this obediant as a puppy..."
    he mumbled, as he closed the door behind him, and darted back to his dorm in the stormy night.

    Sakura finished
    her Ramen, and leaned back in her chair. "Why does Ramen always taste
    better in your dorm Naruto?" Naruto smiled, and picked up her bowl. "I
    guess Ramen loves me as much as I love it!" Sakura laughed, and
    stood up. "You guys made a mess!" She said, looking over the table.
    Cards were strewn about, and there were a few noodles on the table. She
    grabbed a cloth, and wet it under the sink water. She wiped it over the
    table, scooping the cards up as she went. "No, Sakura-chan, I'll clean
    it!" She finished wiping down the table, and placed the cloth on the
    counter. "Don't worry about it. Call it a thanks for the Ramen." She
    smiled, and lifted herself up to sit on the counter. "Why couldn't you
    sleep?" She asked, looking out the Window. Naruto took a seat on the
    counter next to Sakura. "Well... Kikara wouldn't stop howling until
    Kiba got up and walked her. Thats when he realized that I was still
    up." Naruto tilted his head back, until it rested on the top cabinets.
    "... And I couldn't stop wondering about when we'll find Sasuke again."


    Sakura's eyes widened. She turned her head, and looked at Naruto, who turned his eyes to meet her's. "Thats exactly why I
    couldn't sleep!" She cried out. Naruto slid off the counter, and
    disappeared into the next room. He returned with a familiar framed
    photo of when they had started out as a team. Naruto took his place on
    the counter-top yet again. He held out the photo. "Remember that?... We
    were just kids. We had no idea." Sakura took the photo, and held it in
    her hands. Naruto had bought a nicer frame for it than she did. She
    stared out the window. "...Do you think Sasuke ever thinks about us?"
    Naruto looked down at the floor. ". . . Sasuke. . ." he muttered, as he
    looked back to Sakura. "Just don't you go anywhere Sakura-chan." She
    placed an arm around him, and they shared a soft kiss. "I'll see you
    tomorrow Naruto." Naruto ruffled her hair, and smiled. "Sure thing."
    Sakura made her way to the door, and closed it behind her. Naruto slid
    off the counter, got back into his boxers, slid into bed, and turned
    out the light.

    - - - - - ]* * * X * * *[- - - - -

    "Whats
    happening!?" Shino glanced around. "Calm down, calm down!" Bugs swarmed
    everywhere. They buzzed around noisily, and were batting at the window
    pane. "Stop it this isntant!" The bugs ignored his orders, and
    continued to swarm. ". . . something isn't right." Shino muttered, as
    he stared out at the moon. Tomrrow night would be a full moon...
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    Re: Hearts and Daggers- Chapter 1: Night at the Uzumaki dorm

    Post by NarutoBoyFreakah on Thu Oct 04 2007, 21:41

    Wow!! Good job, Mizuko-kun!!
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    Re: Hearts and Daggers- Chapter 1: Night at the Uzumaki dorm

    Post by Mizuko Karasashi on Thu Oct 04 2007, 21:45

    Thanks! ^^
    (I only get points if this gets good reviews) O.O
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    Post by NarutoBoyFreakah on Thu Oct 04 2007, 21:50

    Lawlz =p I wanna more alreadeh

    Maybe I'll do a story... can I do a Fruits Basket story? It'll prolly suk tho =p
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    Re: Hearts and Daggers- Chapter 1: Night at the Uzumaki dorm

    Post by Sayomi Hatake on Thu Oct 04 2007, 21:59

    hey you can get points for getting good reciews on a story??
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    Re: Hearts and Daggers- Chapter 1: Night at the Uzumaki dorm

    Post by Mizuko Karasashi on Thu Oct 04 2007, 22:01

    Sayomi Hatake wrote:hey you can get points for getting good reciews on a story??
    Thats right, its a B-rank mission. It has to get good reviews though, apparently(that wasn't exactly in the mission desription, but w/e, I'll rise to the challenge).
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    Re: Hearts and Daggers- Chapter 1: Night at the Uzumaki dorm

    Post by Sayomi Hatake on Thu Oct 04 2007, 22:05

    Mizuko Karasashi wrote:
    Sayomi Hatake wrote:hey you can get points for getting good reciews on a story??
    Thats right, its a B-rank mission. It has to get good reviews though, apparently(that wasn't exactly in the mission desription, but w/e, I'll rise to the challenge).

    so do i need permission to post it by a kage or can i jsut post??
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    Post by Sayomi Hatake on Thu Oct 04 2007, 22:06

    by the way i like it you get a 10 form me :D
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    Post by Sayomi Hatake on Thu Oct 04 2007, 22:07

    asuming that 10 is the highest lol
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    Re: Hearts and Daggers- Chapter 1: Night at the Uzumaki dorm

    Post by LyricalM on Fri Oct 05 2007, 06:57

    1-20
    i rate it a 18
    it's really good
    nice work... keep it up =3
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    Post by NarutoBoyFreakah on Fri Oct 05 2007, 15:30

    Yeah I'll make it an 100 'cause I like really good stories.
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    Post by FantacyOfNaruto on Fri Oct 05 2007, 15:33

    awsomeness ^^
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    Re: Hearts and Daggers- Chapter 1: Night at the Uzumaki dorm

    Post by rocknrolljunkie989 on Sat Oct 06 2007, 22:35

    On a 1-50 scale, I'd give this a 47. It's really good.
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    Post by LyricalM on Mon Oct 08 2007, 09:17

    i give it a 46....it's awsome
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    Post by GL on Mon Oct 08 2007, 09:46

    i love it!! 98/100 i cant wait, i want more. ^-^
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    Post by LyricalM on Mon Oct 08 2007, 12:26

    same here keep on writing :zts:
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    Re: Hearts and Daggers- Chapter 1: Night at the Uzumaki dorm

    Post by Kiami on Fri Oct 26 2007, 15:01

    wah!
    I loved it!
    98/100!
    Hmm..Maybe I should write a story...is is one of my passions..
    But for now, rock on!
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    Re: Hearts and Daggers- Chapter 1: Night at the Uzumaki dorm

    Post by Friesenator on Sun Oct 28 2007, 21:36

    I give You an 11 out of 10, I can't wait to read more, is this a Naru X Saku or is this just a general story with no romance?
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    Post by Choushi on Sun Oct 28 2007, 21:39

    u have great potential

    keep it up
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    Post by KarateKeyaQ on Sun Nov 04 2007, 12:06

    Your story was awesome!@! 20/20
    But can we only make Fanfics based on Naruto? Or can we do other animes?
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    Post by Friesenator on Sun Nov 04 2007, 12:13

    Wuv your avi NejiFan
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    Post by KarateKeyaQ on Sun Nov 04 2007, 12:40

    THANK U!
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    Post by Friesenator on Mon Nov 12 2007, 19:22

    Update soon, please, i wanna read more!!!!
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    Re: Hearts and Daggers- Chapter 1: Night at the Uzumaki dorm

    Post by Mizuko Karasashi on Sun Apr 20 2008, 12:44

    Alright, alright, I came back, and see that I have good reviews. If I get the time, I'll post chapter two. Thanks for the encouragement guys. Its good reviews and constant readers that keep writers motivated.

    edit: Oh yeah, and Naruto and Sakura are a couple in this fanfic.
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    Re: Hearts and Daggers- Chapter 1: Night at the Uzumaki dorm

    Post by kino inuzuka on Mon Jun 09 2008, 13:57

    awsome

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