Kusanagi:The Four Swords Legend

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    Kusanagi:The Four Swords Legend

    Post by Renden2005 on Mon Sep 24 2007, 21:40

    Prologue:

    "The first thing I want to tell you is that if you are looking to be told a story of either a factual or fictional nature, then I apologize. I'm apologizing because you will find neither of them here for i can't tell stories well. But I guess I can't leave you empty handed so..." *the man places his hands on your head* "...I guess I'll have to show you...you will now see everything that I've seen and heard to an extent..." *a light flashes around both of you and our vision begins*


    Chapter One) The Remembrance:

    You open your eyes and you can't see. You are in a dark room...or so it seems. A little bit of light appears as if you had given a mental command, and you see a man standing next to you. "So..." the man said, "...shall I begin this mental storyboard?" Upon closer inspection you see it is the man who you were talking to not five minutes ago, and that he's blind, but he still seems to be looking, almost through you into your mind.
    There is another flash of light and you see yourself standing alone on a roof in Konohagakure, The Village Hidden in the Leaves, overlooking over a fight scene. You see three Jounin and two...Akatsuki??? "But the Akatsuki was demolished twelve years ago." you try to explain to yourself, "Its sad how nobody talks about the battle anymore...its an important part of our history...there are now only four Hidden Villages, one for each one of them that fought."
    Now paying attention to the fight to see if you can tell what fight this is. Right away you can tell by the shock of gray hair that one of the Jounin is the leader of the Hidden Fang Village, the "Copy Ninja" Hatake Kakashi. The others are all unfamiliar to you. You see Kakashi fall at one of the Akatsuki guy's feet as a guy with a bowl cut comes in and kicks an Akatsuki guy yelling, "Dynamic Entry".
    You appear in the dark room again suddenly. You see the blind man off by himself as if thinking about something. "Where are we?What are you doing?" you yell to him getting no reply. "Hel-" you get cut off by him saying "We're inside your mind...this is a genjutsu...and I am thinking about what to show you next...this should be good."
    You try to ask him more but are plunged into a different room where you see the leaders of the Hidden Fan and Whirlpool Villages, Uchiha Sasuke and Uzumaki Naruto. You see the same Akatsuki guys and now you can see that one of them is the blind guy. Sasuke yells "I've survived!" and charges the blind man with his and Kakashi's legendary Chidori, and to your amazement, the blind man knocks it off coarse and into a wall. Naruto just stood back, dazed. When the blind man looks up you see that his eyes are red.
    Everything goes black a you appear inside the room that was described as your mind. You see the man who once had red eyes and he asks, "Does anything make sense yet?" to which you reply that you are even more confused than when you started. He looks in your general direction, closes his now pale eyes, and everything goes black and changes.
    You open your eyes you see the blind man now confronting Uzumaki Naruto, Hatake Kakashi, and the pink haired leader of the Village Hidden in the Cherry Blossoms, Haruno Sakura. You try to ask him what is going on but before you can he turns to you and looks at you and you know that he knows that you are there whereas the rest don't. The ninja all start to move, save for Naruto. You can only assume that he's in a Genjutsu. This is proven when he starts to choke himself. He suddenly stops as Sakura and some old woman put their hands on his shoulders.
    You appear back in the room of your mind. You look around and find the blind man. He asks you, "Are you are ready to see what isn't written down in history?" and everything goes dark.


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    Re: Kusanagi:The Four Swords Legend

    Post by Sasori Kung fu masta on Mon Sep 24 2007, 21:58

    nice so far.

    check the grammar more carefully tho. sentance structure too.

    story lines good.

    ^__^
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    Re: Kusanagi:The Four Swords Legend

    Post by Renden2005 on Mon Sep 24 2007, 22:01

    :P
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    Re: Kusanagi:The Four Swords Legend

    Post by theBOSS. on Mon Sep 24 2007, 22:02

    dude.

    you've seriously gotta put this up on FFN.
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    Re: Kusanagi:The Four Swords Legend

    Post by Renden2005 on Mon Sep 24 2007, 22:04

    *scratches back of head*...but i have no account...and can't get one...
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    Re: Kusanagi:The Four Swords Legend

    Post by theBOSS. on Mon Sep 24 2007, 22:05

    o.O

    i would let you use mine... but i have stories on too...

    meh, why can't you make one?
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    Re: Kusanagi:The Four Swords Legend

    Post by Renden2005 on Mon Sep 24 2007, 22:08

    this is mom's cpu...long story...
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    Re: Kusanagi:The Four Swords Legend

    Post by theBOSS. on Mon Sep 24 2007, 22:10

    ^^;;;

    it's good anyways, but i gotta go work on my other stories too... and get started on that stupid oneshot series...

    ugh, schedules suck.
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    Re: Kusanagi:The Four Swords Legend

    Post by Renden2005 on Mon Sep 24 2007, 22:12

    yea...
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    Re: Kusanagi:The Four Swords Legend

    Post by D-Dei on Mon Sep 24 2007, 22:58

    ah- it's nice.

    T.T akatsuki demolished...

    (sorry, whennever akatsuki is said, yea...)
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    Re: Kusanagi:The Four Swords Legend

    Post by Renden2005 on Mon Sep 24 2007, 23:00

    well...sorry...its a way to keep people interested you know???
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    Created a crazy world in wonderland
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    Was then shot by a cross-eyed man
    Out from the wound then bloomed a flower
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    A beautiful figure there in wonderland
    She had fooled many people to do her bid
    A strange country was then created up
    The Alice was the queen of the country
    Possessed by a dream of distortion
    Afraid of losing her life to death
    Ruling the country of hers forever

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    Under the blue rose trees, the two had tea time
    An invitation to them from the castle was
    The playing card of hearts

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    They were curious througout the wonderland
    They traveled through the doors to see all kinds of things
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    Re: Kusanagi:The Four Swords Legend

    Post by D-Dei on Mon Sep 24 2007, 23:03

    ooh blind dude = itachi?...
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    Re: Kusanagi:The Four Swords Legend

    Post by Choushi on Mon Sep 24 2007, 23:04

    nice i see that hes looking at the past....when gai kicks itachi...and when itachi blocks the chidori....Question???? does he know a lot of the konoha nin cuz theyre famous now in the story????
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    Re: Kusanagi:The Four Swords Legend

    Post by Renden2005 on Mon Sep 24 2007, 23:44

    yes to both...plus its from what he's seen personally and from what he's heard and had proven...
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    Re: Kusanagi:The Four Swords Legend

    Post by Koneko_Bozu8 on Thu Sep 27 2007, 00:52

    *punches fist into air* SUGOI!!! I like it ^-^...
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    Post by Renden2005 on Thu Sep 27 2007, 01:20

    thank you Koneko-chan...
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    Re: Kusanagi:The Four Swords Legend

    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Fri Sep 28 2007, 00:05

    *curious*storyline is getting good. This mysterious blind man reminds me of Itachi.
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    Re: Kusanagi:The Four Swords Legend

    Post by Renden2005 on Fri Sep 28 2007, 00:07

    CrispinFreemanWatcher16 wrote:*curious*storyline is getting good. This mysterious blind man reminds me of Itachi.

    lol...yea...
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    Re: Kusanagi:The Four Swords Legend

    Post by Titaniumxvx on Fri Sep 28 2007, 00:16

    Wow......bit confused at first but awesome

    Great job on writing the story

    I wonder what the guy means when he says "Are you are ready to see what isn't written down in history???"

    ooo...mysterious...


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    Post by Renden2005 on Fri Sep 28 2007, 00:18

    thanks Titan...i'm working on chapter 2 now...
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    Re: Kusanagi:The Four Swords Legend

    Post by Furaiigon on Fri Sep 28 2007, 00:26

    CHAPPIE TWO!!!! CHAPPIE TWOO!!!!!! :cheers:

    WOOTS!~~~

    cant wait =>w<=
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    Post by Renden2005 on Fri Sep 28 2007, 00:27

    well it'll be soon...*scratches back of head*...hopefully...lol
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    Re: Kusanagi:The Four Swords Legend

    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Fri Sep 28 2007, 00:29

    *thumbs up*maybe add some more sensory details, that would be cool, but its still great!
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    Post by Renden2005 on Fri Sep 28 2007, 00:31

    thanks...
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    Re: Kusanagi:The Four Swords Legend

    Post by amaterasu on Fri Sep 28 2007, 21:18

    ahh i tought gai was in akatsuki but as i read further on i understood... tis prettygood

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