WOTN FF BY CHOUSHI RENDEN and KAZEKAGE Q

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    Re: WOTN FF BY CHOUSHI RENDEN and KAZEKAGE Q

    Post by yondaime2 on Tue Oct 30 2007, 01:51

    i like it a lot. cud i be included in the storm village since i am one of the only active members there
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    Post by Choushi on Tue Oct 30 2007, 21:34

    thats wat i was planning do u have an alternative name
    cuz yondaime doesnt work
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    Post by Choushi on Sat Nov 03 2007, 16:10

    new chapter is UP!!!!!!!!! not that great though
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    Post by quater on Sat Nov 03 2007, 16:36

    I kinda liked it.
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    Post by Choushi on Sat Nov 03 2007, 16:46

    thanx Q
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    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Sat Nov 03 2007, 20:19

    the background of the shadow ninja is cool and interesting.
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    Post by Renden2005 on Sat Nov 03 2007, 20:45

    why're you not sending me the stories so i can fix them up???and why'd it go chapter 1, 2 ,3 ,4 ,7???
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    Post by Choushi on Sat Nov 03 2007, 22:05

    cuz there are lost chapters in my mind................jk actually idk
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    Post by Vongola on Sun Nov 04 2007, 09:39

    Lols getting rly confused by choushi's comment XD
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    Post by Choushi on Sun Nov 04 2007, 10:22

    hey everybody
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    Post by Vongola on Sun Nov 04 2007, 10:48

    Hello
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    Post by Choushi on Sun Nov 04 2007, 23:25

    hey yall.....new chapter............not that great but yea
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    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Sun Nov 04 2007, 23:52

    i give it an 8, choushi.
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    Post by yondaime2 on Fri Nov 09 2007, 21:46

    ok new name is germanpowerhouse
    if thats too long, use ichigo
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    Post by Titaniumxvx on Sat Nov 17 2007, 19:26

    ...ooo....
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    Post by Sasori Kung fu masta on Sat Nov 17 2007, 23:59

    bummer. i don't think im going to be in it XD

    i think i should tho. nah just kidding.

    its good tho Oh Yeah!
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    Post by D-Dei on Fri Dec 07 2007, 01:33

    deathy, shut up with your "i suck at writing" crap.. -0-;;


    you make me feel bad


    anyways.. its good, just reallly long.. Dazed
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    Post by Choushi on Mon Dec 10 2007, 01:11

    NEW CHAPTER....


    chapter 6:revenge
    Q:
    *at the verge of tears* they....they were only genin...

    Oni & Choushi:
    THE GENIN!?!?!?!?

    oni:
    that monster..killing young genin like that....

    Choushi:
    lets get him..oni

    oni:
    WHAT?! we cant fight a shinobi like that

    Choushi:
    i
    know he's powerful...but we gotta try *tearing up* u dont remember
    oni??? they were kids...kids with dreams...kids that wanted to help
    their country

    Oni:
    i know...i know

    *flash back*

    genin 1:
    ONI SAMA...I'm tired

    oni:
    *looks back at the struggling genin...he is carrying loads of Equipment on his back.* hold up everybody...

    choushi:
    *stops* whats up oni..

    oni:
    dont
    you realize...these genin arent normal genin...you see we were taught
    to be balenced...to know taijutsu, genjutsu, and ninjutusu...these
    genin here...are all specialized in one area.

    Choushi:
    *looks at the bunch* oh i see what you mean....*points at genin with a great physique* so he...is a main taijutsu user....

    genin 2:
    Hai

    oni:
    *points at another genin* her...shes a medical nin...

    Genin 3:
    hai

    choushi:
    that last kid...in the back...why does he carry everybody elses bags??

    Genin 1:
    Choushi-sama *attempts to bow but almost falls he is so tired* i am the weapons specialist......

    oni:
    so all those bags...they're yours?? WTF?!?!

    Genin 1 :
    yes sir...

    choushi:
    so they were taught just in one area....because if they were taught our way...it would take too long....

    oni:

    so u guys are ready to fight

    all genin:
    hai oni sama...

    oni:
    but dont you have families?? dont you have something to live for??

    Genin 3:
    well
    oni sama....we want to have experience in the battlefield so that some
    day we can be like you.....an anbu...we all want to become the national
    protectors of the sand....

    *flashback ends*

    oni:
    lets go

    choushi:
    are you ready

    oni:
    they
    wanted to be like us choushi...they wanted to share their dreams with
    us...we cannot let their memory be defiled by our cowardice...we have
    to get revenge

    *fades out to the distance where titan is*

    Titan:
    *looks at the bodies* hmph...pitiful....what does the sand take me for..a fool??? time to finish this....Shadow manipulation!!!
    *from the darkness two arms made of shadows appear*
    GO!!!
    *thrusts his arms and the shadow arms do the same...*

    *goes back to the sands army*

    Q:
    MEN THE TIME IS NOW.....CHARGE!!!!!

    army:
    *loud screams of anger* A:LFGKJOPEIWJKGJNLSKJWEROPIJSRRRRGGGHA
    *runs twoard titan*

    Q:
    oni, choushi...

    *both appear*

    Choushi & oni:
    yes, Q sama??

    Q:
    im so sorry....the genin didnt stand a chance...but maybe our numbers will give us the advantage *looks out to the battlefield.*

    *on the battle field the two shadow arms are cutting, slashing and tearing apart the army*

    Q:
    RETREAT?!?!!?!!?!?

    *the
    army is now down to a small number...the small number are all injured
    and start racing back....the shadow arms pick up two more and bury them
    in the clouds up above*

    *after the shadow arms come for Q.*

    Q:
    SAND WALL!! *a sand wall comes up from the ground behind the small army to protect them...the shadow arms still come for Q...

    oni:
    *takes
    out sword* time for our revenge*takes out sword*lets go choushi *flash
    steps on the ledge as Q has the sand follow oni as he flash steps so he
    can stay airborne*

    choushi:
    ok oni...
    HOUSEI!!!
    *the two titanium pipes are released and increse in size as choushi grabs them*

    jin:
    choushi...go...i'll watch Q-sama

    Choushi:
    *bows* hai jin-sama *jumps off ledge onto the sand wall

    oni:
    *close to the shadow arm*
    GRRAAAGHAAA *slashes the shadow arm..it falls down limp*

    choushi:
    SONIC BOOM!!!
    *a wave of sound sclices the other shadow arm it too falls limp*

    oni:
    that was too easy....*looks out to the distance at titan* WTF?!?! hes not going for the army anymore?!? he's going for.....Q SAMA!!!

    *the pieces of the shadow arms connect together and shoot straight for the kazekage...and both hit him with clinched fists*

    oni, choushi and jin:
    KAZEKAGE-SAMA

    *oni
    jumps from the sand tower onto the sand wall pulling out both
    swords...and sending wind bursts at both arms...cutting them in half
    again.*
    jin:
    you will not harm the kazekage

    *Q is in the sand tower knocked out cold*

    choushi:
    oni...get over here

    oni:
    *flash steps to choushi* yea???..

    choushi:
    we cant beat those shadow....things by just hitting them...we have to go to the source...

    oni:
    but the kazekage will be dead by the time we get there....he's like four miles away

    choushi:
    dont worry...i made a new jutsu just for an occasion like this...
    SOUND TELEPORTATION!!!
    hang on oni
    *both their bodies dissolve*

    *FADES OUT*

    jose:
    OH SO YOU THOUGHT YOU WERE GOOD?? well ur good for genin...but for the job i need you for...not even close

    spyke:
    wh...what are these

    jose:
    you are in my ice tombs...this is jagon...and this is my other jutsu..
    RAINING ICE SHARDS!!!
    *ice shards appear and shoot into the ice tombs*

    kisame:
    haha ur jutsu doesnt do anything...XD

    jose:
    it doesnt work?? or does it
    *as the shards melt the water turns into purple liquid spewing into the ice tomb*

    spyke:
    thats....POISON!?!!?!?!?!

    jose:
    ur so smart spyke...haha..hahaha..lol..buwahhahahaha

    ALL GENIN:
    *screams of terror*
    aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhggggggggghhhhhaaa

    *fades out*

    *oni and choushi both appear in front of titan*

    titan:
    ooh a challenge...finally

    choushi:
    STFU! alright? you say nothing....*swings aori kane* SOUND MANIPULATION: FISTS OF FURY!!!
    *transparent fists are made and thrusted foward at titan*

    titan:
    lol...*bring
    arms up and simultaniously bringing up shadows engulfing the fist in
    darkness* here...some of your own medicine..*blasts the darkness at
    choushi...hitting him square in the eyes*

    choushi:
    AAAGGRRGARAFGRGAGARGRGRGARG *flys back covering eyes..hitting the ground*

    oni:
    CHOUSHI???
    *looks at his fallen comrade..then back at titan* thats it *brings out
    sword....pointing it at the sky the faint aura of a pheonix appears
    over oni...oni's eyes glow a bluish red and his sword is covered in
    flames also...* you ....you cannot kill many of my comrades and attempt
    to assassinate the kazekage without unleashing the fury of the red
    pheonix of the sand.....Oni...me...

    titan:
    ur full of bull...ur village is a bunch of *stabbed* uugh.....*falls onto his knees*

    oni:
    i will uphold my way of the ninja.
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    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Mon Dec 10 2007, 02:05

    Awesome!!! Who's Oni?
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    Post by Choushi on Mon Dec 10 2007, 02:06

    its a secret...ask renden...
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    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Mon Dec 10 2007, 02:09

    ok^^
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    Post by Renden2005 on Mon Dec 10 2007, 02:10

    why ask me???that's just stupid...
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    Post by Choushi on Mon Dec 10 2007, 02:12

    cuz its funny...and i think ur best to tell her
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    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Mon Dec 10 2007, 02:19

    plz tell me Puppy Dog Eyes
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    Post by Renden2005 on Mon Dec 10 2007, 02:23

    fine...

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