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    Oh, Mother

    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Sat Jan 03 2009, 15:03

    She seems so distance...and far away..
    is she someone who i'll be able to grasp if i see her someday
    I clearly resemble her...don't I?
    If i could see picture of "you"...my heart itself would fall to the floor..
    You there in me residing in appearance and DNA..and ur there and i can't ignore
    Questions webbing over my mind...that i seek to break with you
    unknowning of family is why i have come to you...

    Its painful at times to see others with their mothers as i think of "you"
    How are you..? what do you do?..Do you still remember me..as i do you..?
    There's so many questions that i have yet to ask
    As for you i am still willing to grasp
    Always lurking in mind, your someone I want to find
    I'd drop to my knees feeling my heart plummet If I could meet you
    No one knows the lonliness that resides in me that I feel
    Its difficult to talk about "you" and not struggle with the i can muster
    Oh, unbelievably there's a cluster of emotions I'm feeling
    Do you understand these words i'm concealing...

    As the years go by...i long more to search for you
    to help cope with these lost feelings that are spilled upon me
    I long to understand "you"..those feelings "you" felt when you had to say goodbye to me
    It must have been difficult...but I believe it was for the better
    I long to look for "you"..brown eyed...brown haired...woman
    Could i be that mirrored-reflectionof you
    You said "goodbye"...but now i long to say "not a day goes by that I don't wonder of you"
    I wish to say "hello.."

    Oh, mother...


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    Re: Oh, Mother

    Post by Temari on Sat Jan 03 2009, 15:05

    I like it a lot. It reminds me of my life in the present and past. It reminds me of how my mother is acting now a days and how i miss....I can't say who it is or I'll just cry.
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    Re: Oh, Mother

    Post by judai12 on Sat Jan 03 2009, 15:22

    its soo sad:(
    but really good poem
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    Re: Oh, Mother

    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Sat Jan 03 2009, 15:27

    thank u tema & judai.
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    Re: Oh, Mother

    Post by judai12 on Sat Jan 03 2009, 15:36

    ur welcome^^
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    Re: Oh, Mother

    Post by Little_Shiro on Sat Jan 03 2009, 18:36

    Its amazing ^_^ -i just said a sad peom was amazing Hehehe... -
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    Re: Oh, Mother

    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Sat Jan 03 2009, 18:39

    thanks shiro, lol. its the intended mood shiro but thanks.
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    Re: Oh, Mother

    Post by Little_Shiro on Sat Jan 03 2009, 18:40

    i know its a sad peom (like makes u sad not a bad peom xD)

    but its a good sad peom ^_^

    get it?
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    Re: Oh, Mother

    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Sat Jan 03 2009, 18:42

    *nods*i know what you mean, thanks^^
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    Re: Oh, Mother

    Post by Little_Shiro on Sat Jan 03 2009, 18:43

    xD it was hard to put the oppisits into a sentance xD
    ^ spell check
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    Re: Oh, Mother

    Post by Laura-Chan on Sat Jan 03 2009, 19:31

    Awwwies, it's so sad!
    I couldn't imagine that pain, or feeling feeling of 'if'.
    This poem is well put for people to understand it!

    But it's an AMAZING poem!
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    Re: Oh, Mother

    Post by azuki_dashi16 on Sat Jan 03 2009, 19:41

    Oh Yeah! Amazing!
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    Re: Oh, Mother

    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Sat Jan 03 2009, 19:53

    thank u laura & azuzu
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    Re: Oh, Mother

    Post by sabaku no ketsueki on Sat Jan 03 2009, 20:08

    really good, cris
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    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Sat Jan 03 2009, 20:46

    thanks saba
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    Re: Oh, Mother

    Post by GL on Sun Jan 04 2009, 16:29

    s sad and beautiful. great job.
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    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Sun Jan 04 2009, 19:16

    thank u GL
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    Re: Oh, Mother

    Post by gaara12 on Sun Jan 04 2009, 22:16

    OMG! that is such a good poem! how do u do that?
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    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Sun Jan 04 2009, 22:19

    thank u gaara
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    Re: Oh, Mother

    Post by quater on Sun Jan 04 2009, 23:07

    I'm not sure if this was the poem you meant for me to read. But I thought this one was pretty solid. Overall, yeah. Liked it, though it was saddish.
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    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Sun Jan 04 2009, 23:11

    thank u Q, this was the poem i wanted ya to read.
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    Post by Darns on Sun Jan 11 2009, 08:50

    Its beautiful...
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    Post by neon kun on Sun Jan 11 2009, 09:34

    aw, so cute. Puppy Dog Eyes
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    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Sun Jan 11 2009, 09:51

    thanks darnas & jan
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    Re: Oh, Mother

    Post by AkiQ on Sun Jan 11 2009, 10:57

    Nice one Crispy.

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