Crispin's 4th long poem

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    Crispin's 4th long poem

    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Wed Jul 02 2008, 23:57

    The Dove's Spirit

    ...That one day in late August...when the sun..still shined its warmth...to wave its goodbye..for the breeze of new autumn...i notice a magnificent dove...standing there...noticing this timid...and yet quiet sparrow...you...begin...to show this sparrow....what it means...to enjoy the meanings..of life...taking me under wing....like...a lost puppy...

    You show me everything.....opening up my....deep and graceful eyes...your kindred..spirit..shining a bright..with determination like that...of fire with deep passion...I begin to understand how...you see things....you begin unlocking the "me"...tearing down the walls of...my caged heart....I find a new "me" inside you...you...open up the huge doors entwined with vines....to the deepest parts...of my heart...

    I dig deep..down inside..beyond the unkown of my soul...to ask..a vow...of love...to this marvelous...and holy dove... you the dove...take me...in a vow..of love to....forever be with me....As the sparrow and dove rise into the sky....we open up...with great strength...a most loving..bond...stronger...than anything..i've ever..felt...

    I begin to shine along side this dove...as our months...together...go by...
    i trap every beautiful and...harmonious moment....with us...i continue..to crack the shell...like a crab...to your heart.......making ur eyes...grow soft..like that..of a calm lake...i bask in the beauty of your heart...

    I wait for you like...a sparrow waiting for the greeting of the sun...each day passing....the less i see..the smiling face...of the dove...but i still wait...no matter what...like an austere fog...not wanting to depart...the dove shows his face and glimpses of times...saying "i will always be here for...even if it may not be physically...your right here in my heart..and in spirit".....i begin to feel much..relief like a thorn being ripped out...of my soul..this sparrow..right here...begins...to melt into the soul of the dove...

    You kept your promise...my dove...i never want to be without the soul of this dove ever again....love...i found it within..you...and nothing...can change that....not that of a curse..named "Separation" or the long distance..between..us...

    A year later....this dove and sparrow...join..in the summer of love...to bring....eternal grace...to the land....as the 2nd summer of love...
    they become one with the earth..forever engraving it...with their music..of love..the winds..whisper..."be happy and live on together and you can conquer anything"

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    Re: Crispin's 4th long poem

    Post by KarateKeyaQ on Wed Jul 02 2008, 23:59

    :D This one is one of the best. I am in love with it xDD. The ending is great. Puppy Dog Eyes
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    Re: Crispin's 4th long poem

    Post by judai12 on Thu Jul 03 2008, 00:00

    soooooo cooool. i love it.^^
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    Re: Crispin's 4th long poem

    Post by Meika-Chan on Thu Jul 03 2008, 00:03

    =____=;

    So long... my old eyes...
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    Re: Crispin's 4th long poem

    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Thu Jul 03 2008, 00:05

    i told ya its..rly long.... -_-;;
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    Re: Crispin's 4th long poem

    Post by Meika-Chan on Thu Jul 03 2008, 00:05

    XD

    Yeah, but it's really good :D
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    Re: Crispin's 4th long poem

    Post by judai12 on Thu Jul 03 2008, 00:06

    long be lovey and cool
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    Re: Crispin's 4th long poem

    Post by Sasori Kung fu masta on Thu Jul 03 2008, 00:08

    Love I LOVE! its my second fav.
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    Re: Crispin's 4th long poem

    Post by judai12 on Thu Jul 03 2008, 00:09

    I know right Blushing
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    Re: Crispin's 4th long poem

    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Thu Jul 03 2008, 00:12

    thank you!!^/////////^
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    Re: Crispin's 4th long poem

    Post by PeinQAkatsuki on Thu Jul 31 2008, 14:06

    Awesome visuals, and nice word flowing. It's great!!!
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    Re: Crispin's 4th long poem

    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Thu Jul 31 2008, 14:08

    thank you!!
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    Re: Crispin's 4th long poem

    Post by PeinQAkatsuki on Thu Jul 31 2008, 14:09

    ^.^
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    Re: Crispin's 4th long poem

    Post by InnerCherry on Sat Aug 23 2008, 14:34

    Love
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    Re: Crispin's 4th long poem

    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Sat Aug 23 2008, 14:39

    yeah thats my longest love poem^^
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    Re: Crispin's 4th long poem

    Post by Sayomi Hatake on Wed Aug 27 2008, 00:52

    ... wow ..... I don't think I can say anything bad about this one XD well your "...."'s got annoying but this was really beautiful to read really nice work!!
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    Re: Crispin's 4th long poem

    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Wed Aug 27 2008, 01:03

    lol thanks

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