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    Crispin's 3rd poem

    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Wed Jul 02 2008, 00:03

    A Promise

    I stand upon the edges of the rocky...descent below to the seas..beautiful and untameful waves....waiting like a tree for their blossoms...i see you greet me like...like the glorious dove u are....on the night of this austere moon...shining down on two humans....

    You make a promise to me....to forever be with me....protecting like the mother of a cub....we vow our love to each other.....hand intertwined in hand....my eyes..shining...with the hope of this moment...engraving into my soul...you bringing out the joyful me...like the spring of a new tommorow...

    After that faithful night...as the weeks and months past by....i return to this save haven...where i fell for you..like a shooting star..plummeting to the earth...I wait...each night coming back to this same spot...I mumble...
    "a promise..u will continue to keep ur promise"...i know u will...

    This trusting bond that the two share grows estatically...and one day in late August when the moon has just outstretched it arms into the sky....
    I see a distant figure walking towards me...my overjoyed heart shining in my eyes...i run to you..in embrace of long lost love....

    You bear something...in the posession of ur hands...."Here, i told you i have not forgotten your promise, and this is my promise to you to forever be with you.".......A ring....as he slips on this ring...he solemnly.. swears...
    whispering..."my promise...i won't let you be all by yourself..my sparrow"
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    Re: Crispin's 3rd poem

    Post by Sasori Kung fu masta on Wed Jul 02 2008, 00:13

    holymoly so deep.

    i love this one the most. <3
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    Re: Crispin's 3rd poem

    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Wed Jul 02 2008, 00:14

    thanks^///^
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    Re: Crispin's 3rd poem

    Post by inufan52 on Wed Jul 02 2008, 00:14

    .............
    im speechless.......
    now i REALLY know what you're talking about
    the dove and sparrow
    sooooooooooooooooooooooooo
    adorableeeeeeeee
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    Re: Crispin's 3rd poem

    Post by Akia on Wed Jul 02 2008, 00:18

    "Oh damn that was so beautiful!"
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    Re: Crispin's 3rd poem

    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Wed Jul 02 2008, 00:23

    thank you.. thank you ^///////^
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    Re: Crispin's 3rd poem

    Post by MissQoolKat on Wed Jul 02 2008, 00:38

    Love This is amazing. So cute! Nice! [:
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    Re: Crispin's 3rd poem

    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Wed Jul 02 2008, 00:41

    thank u kat
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    Re: Crispin's 3rd poem

    Post by Meika-Chan on Wed Jul 02 2008, 00:53

    Amazing as usual :3
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    Re: Crispin's 3rd poem

    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Wed Jul 02 2008, 01:01

    thanks bloodly^^
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    Re: Crispin's 3rd poem

    Post by KarateKeyaQ on Wed Jul 02 2008, 02:49

    Aww You did it again Mrs.poet :D Nice going.

    So very Deep. So very good ^_^
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    Re: Crispin's 3rd poem

    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Wed Jul 02 2008, 03:07

    thank u neji^^
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    Re: Crispin's 3rd poem

    Post by NarutoBoyFreakah on Wed Jul 02 2008, 03:12

    yay! it's very well written!!

    ME LIKEY!!!!!
    kudos to you! 100 that is XDD
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    Re: Crispin's 3rd poem

    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Wed Jul 02 2008, 03:13

    thanks NBF!!!
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    Re: Crispin's 3rd poem

    Post by neon kun on Wed Jul 02 2008, 08:25

    ..wow. awesome as every cris! ^^ you never cease to amaze me. :D
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    Re: Crispin's 3rd poem

    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Wed Jul 02 2008, 10:53

    thanks everyone^__^
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    Re: Crispin's 3rd poem

    Post by Choushi on Wed Jul 02 2008, 13:32

    That was awesome

    but srry..i dont get the dove sparrow thing...can somebody explain that to me???
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    Re: Crispin's 3rd poem

    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Wed Jul 02 2008, 13:36

    thank u choushi

    You have to read my 2nd poem ^_0
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    Re: Crispin's 3rd poem

    Post by PeinQAkatsuki on Thu Jul 31 2008, 14:12

    It's calming, yet it makes you try and relate yourself to it. Very deep, awesomness poem!
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    Re: Crispin's 3rd poem

    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Thu Jul 31 2008, 14:44

    yup my poems are deep^_^truly come frm my heart thanks pein.
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    Re: Crispin's 3rd poem

    Post by judai12 on Thu Jul 31 2008, 20:21

    this one is sooo good
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    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Thu Jul 31 2008, 23:59

    thank you judai^^
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    Re: Crispin's 3rd poem

    Post by InnerCherry on Sat Aug 23 2008, 14:25

    Your peoms are awesome!! Excited I love them!!
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    Re: Crispin's 3rd poem

    Post by CrispinFreemanWatcher16 on Sat Aug 23 2008, 14:27

    thank u cherry!!!^__^
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    Re: Crispin's 3rd poem

    Post by Sayomi Hatake on Wed Aug 27 2008, 01:00

    So then your dove represents your lover??? I kninda suspected it but its very well portrayed in this one!! I love the imagery, your very good at writing!!!

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