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    Re: Charm told me to put this up so I am

    Post by Banouin on Thu Mar 06 2008, 20:36

    Ch 1 UP tell me what you think
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    Re: Charm told me to put this up so I am

    Post by Angelic Harmony on Thu Mar 06 2008, 23:55

    Wow sempai O_O

    That was awaomes!!!
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    Re: Charm told me to put this up so I am

    Post by Banouin on Fri Mar 07 2008, 00:04

    Angelic Harmony wrote:Wow sempai O_O

    That was awaomes!!!

    Ya! Somone thinkgs its ok Happy
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    Re: Charm told me to put this up so I am

    Post by Kagamiko on Fri Mar 07 2008, 15:31

    Yaay! ^^ Me likes more! ^^

    Okay, so just one thing, try to write the whole nevermind, and not just the nvm, it looks better. And do a spellcheck before putting next chapter up, I think you had one or two spelling mistakes. ^^ (says who really, I still don't know how to spell belive/beilive/however it's spelled ^^)(I love spellcheck. If I didn't use spellcheck, I doubt anyone would understand my stories XD *sings the spelling song*)

    Okay, love the story, and can't wait till next chap is up ^^
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    Re: Charm told me to put this up so I am

    Post by Banouin on Fri Mar 07 2008, 15:34

    Kagamiko wrote:Yaay! ^^ Me likes more! ^^

    Okay, so just one thing, try to write the whole nevermind, and not just the nvm, it looks better. And do a spellcheck before putting next chapter up, I think you had one or two spelling mistakes. ^^ (says who really, I still don't know how to spell belive/beilive/however it's spelled ^^)(I love spellcheck. If I didn't use spellcheck, I doubt anyone would understand my stories XD *sings the spelling song*)

    Okay, love the story, and can't wait till next chap is up ^^

    =.= sry if there is, I looked it over and cant tell you how many I had, I fixed the ones I did see
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    Re: Charm told me to put this up so I am

    Post by Banouin on Fri Mar 07 2008, 23:21

    Ch2.....is...up...
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    Re: Charm told me to put this up so I am

    Post by Banouin on Wed Mar 12 2008, 21:41

    Spoiler:

    Chapter 3: A spoken promise between the twin blades

    The sun hung low in the sky, and a light brize picked up. Arron held a lilly that he could not seem to put down, It captivated him. He layed back on a tree. "You know, Its just a flower" Came the voice of his sister that was laying on a branch of the tree. "How long are you going to stare at it?" Arron put the flower down and looked out to the horizon. "Hey Missy, I cant help but have this feeling...like we wont be able to see each other soon..can you do something?" Missy jumped down and seat down next to him "What a odd thing to say, but ya, what do you want me to do? Arron looked at her "Make me a promise, they say in the far north, there are old ruins, they say the ruins stood tall as a testament to the gods. One
    day...lets go see them, even if we go down different roads....lets meet back there." Missy laughed "You got it, I dont know why you are talking about different roads but fine." Missy put a arm around Arron "Now, can we stop all this talk of roads and focus on the festival, its tomorrow!" Arron gave a nod "Ya..the festival where we honor the gods.." He laughed and jumped up. "Well, lets get home eh?" and he took off running down to the village.

    stephanie gave a scream and ran in on her sister with her wooden sword. Her Sister side stepped her and hit her hard in the back sending her to the ground, Stephanie let out a grunt as she hit the ground. "You never just run in on someone that is better then you." she mocked, holding a hand down to help stephanie up. stephanie smacked the hand away and jumped
    up "I dont need your help!" The sound of hands clapping came from behind them. "That is some speed you have to be able to side step it like it was nothing" They both turned around to face Lilling still clapping his hands with a smile. "Who are you?" They both said at the same time. "Me? Oh, I am no one...just someone that passed by a the right time." His smile never left his face. "Dont lie, this is our home!" stephanie said and lilling gave a laugh "Right, I am here to see you, may we talk somewhere more...private?" She shook her head "Here is fine." Lilling gave a sigh "Fine, I am Lilling, and I have come to give you something" He pulled out a sword "I made it, For you." Stephanie took it and Looked at it "why for me...And you want me to think you are Lilling...why would the gods come here?"
    Lilling gave a smile "You will know in time...And Zoanzo said you were not cute, What a lie." And just as he came, He was gone in the blink of a eye. "what the hell..." stephanie did not know what to think. "Come on....we need to get ready for the festival, Its almost time." her sister put her arm on stephanie's head "But.....fine" stephanie said looking at the sword. Back in the trees not to far a man stood with a smirk ear to ear "I found you, my little demi-god." and he gave a laugh.


    The festival had already started by the time Arron and Missy had got there. "Sooo..what are we going to do!?" Missy jumped on Arron's back. "You can get off, how about that?" Missy just laughed "Oh come on, You would make your poor sister walk!" Arron gave a sigh "You would make you poor brother walk around with you on his back?" Missy laughed "YUP! Now get going! On to pay your respects to the gods!" A boy jumped out in there way "Not without me you dont, and hey missy you can get on my back if you want" he said with a simle "No way troy, you perv!" Arron gave a sigh "can we just get this done? we have 5 gods we need to pay respects too." Troy laughed "Fine, fine, Afang is frist ok?" They came to a statue of a woman and missy jumped off of Arron's back and got on her knees with troy next to her. Before Arron could do the same, A woman walked next to him with a hood over her face. "What do you think when you see that statue?" Arron looked at her and did not know what to say, he could not see her face but he knew her someway he knew it. "Umm nothing, I feel nothing" the woman laughed "Thats good, thats not what the goddes afang looks like at all, you should feel nothing looking at it." The woman moved up to his side and wishperd in his ear "Do you want to meet the goddes?" and she walked away. With out thinking Arron's feet moved on there own and he followed after her as she went into the trees outside of the festival. Arron's surroundings faded away and he found himself in a garden. Arron looked around to see a woman sitting in the center holding a lilly, she looked up and smiled at him. "Welcome, do you know where you are?" Arron moved to stand next to her looking around "Yes..." he said it with out thinking. "Thats good, I wanted to meet you before it all starts.." Arron looked at her "What?" Afang shook her head and headed him the lilly. and he was blinded by light and he found himself standing by the statue, he held the lilly in this hand. "What the hell.." "HEY! you coming!? missy called to him as they were walking away.


    Stephanie walked back into her home, She had stayed at the festival longer then her sister and was about to fall alseep. she Walked into her father's and momther's room to say goodnight when she seen a man standing over her Father and momther's bodies, The man had he
    sister by the neck "You know my little demi-god, I was going to cut them up, BUt thats to much blood." ANd he snaped Stephanie's sisters neck. "There, No blood." He gave a laugh Before the body even hit the floor and Stephanie had time to even think of what to do, He had her off the ground by the hair "You know, I feel bad about killing them...but We need
    you, and this is the only way you would come." He gave a laugh "That fool lilling, He made you in hopes you would save it all, But oh, The irony! You will be his end! IN YOU! We win." Stephanie kicked at them man "I dont even know you! WHY are you doing this" The man put her down "OH! Lilling told you nothing!? He is a bigger fool then even I knew!" He bowed "Then let me introduce myself, I my little Demi-god, am Shinsho and I am here to take you to enda, well...after that, there is not much for you, for you will die." Shinsho picked her up with one hand and took her sword with the other "Its time I go see Zoanzo, After Enda has you anyway."

    Enda moved in the room pulling somthing in behind him. "Well my lilling" he called out to lilling who meet him with a simle. "What is it Enda? Enda pulled Stephanie out in front of him. "Look what I found Lilling, It made so HAPPY, I just had to let you see!" Enda gave a laugh and he tossed her to the wall with her sword "Just tell me one thing you old fool! How much of you power did you give her? and how much did you put into the sword!?" Lilling shook his head "Fight me, And find out." Lilling held out his hand and a Sword came out of nowhere "Oh Thats why I am here! Its today you die, old fool!"

    Zoanzo looked up and knew Lilling needed his help as Shinsho came into the room. "Shinsho...what are you doing here?" Shinsho waled up to him "I have somthing I must tell you, my Zoanzo." Zoanzo walked past him "you can tell me latter, come Lilling needs our help." Shinsho laughed "He is not the only one in need of help!" Zoanzo stopped dead, He knew what Shinsho was here for "Traitor!" He turned to him. "No, I am no traitor, you cant be a traitor if you never stood for a side." Zoanzo shook his head "I have no time for this, I will kill you then go to Lillings aid." Shinsho rushed him. "If you think you can!"


    There you all go.....ch 3...Like it, Hate it, Idc

    ps Someone DOES die in Ch 4 Evil Glare
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    Re: Charm told me to put this up so I am

    Post by Rikku-San on Thu Mar 13 2008, 00:38

    Ohhh, awsomes chappy~
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    Re: Charm told me to put this up so I am

    Post by Banouin on Thu Mar 13 2008, 00:48

    Rikku-San wrote:Ohhh, awsomes chappy~

    ..someone liked it...o.o
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    Re: Charm told me to put this up so I am

    Post by Rikku-San on Thu Mar 13 2008, 00:51

    Yea, lol ^^
    It's really good.
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    Re: Charm told me to put this up so I am

    Post by Banouin on Thu Mar 13 2008, 01:05

    Rikku-San wrote:Yea, lol ^^
    It's really good.

    Happy ya!
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    Re: Charm told me to put this up so I am

    Post by Rikku-San on Thu Mar 13 2008, 01:18

    ^^

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