A New Beginning (Prolog - The Temple Of The Ice)

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    A New Beginning (Prolog - The Temple Of The Ice)

    Post by Darkflame on Sat Mar 01 2008, 19:30

    Current Caricters:

    Tundra - The smart guy can be a little smug (fire and water)
    Spark - The careless freeloader (lightning and water)
    Gust - The senceable thinker (wind and earth)
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    As the team of 3 look for the way out of the vast jungle, to get to the field of ice, they come accross a barrier seal to keep people away.


    "Fuck we were so close"

    "Well i'm not turning back"

    "Why we can't get past it"

    "just watch"

    And the ninja having seen the seal he went up to a tree and the tree started to look as if it was breaking apart, and, with that the barrier was gone

    "to easy! lets go!"

    "whatever"

    "sorry did you say something Tundra"

    "arent you two wondering wht it was that easy?" said Tundra

    "you should be use to that by now Tundra"

    "just don't get yourself killed Spark and that gose for you too Gust" said Tundra

    And they head into the Giant Field of ice but they didn't know that as they were getting closer to were they were heading was just going to get harder!

    As they got closer and closer to the Temple of Ice the snow that was falling from the sky was getting thicker and thicker and faster and faster untill all they could see was white!

    Out of no where Tundra shouted "EVERYONE STOP"

    "Wha, what Tundra" said Spark

    "Yah what"

    "there is a pit surronding the temple" said Tundra

    "how do you know this?" the other to said together

    "remember i have fire chakra and i'm using it to melt the snow, but i can only do it for 3 feet"

    "ok so we will have to follow you"

    "correct Gust"

    Now knowing that Tundra can see they start to follow behind him and they arrive to the Temple, but that was the easy part!

    Having entered the temple Tundra started getting worried and started thinking more about what is going on

    "don't stop moving at all; this is an ice temple so we might freeze to death in here so keep moving at all times!" Tundra shouted at the other two

    "well the best way to keep moving is to walk so lets see if we can find what we came for"

    "yah" said Tundra and Gust

    Having taken Tundra the three moved through the passages of the temple coming to many dead ends and many trap rooms but they finnaly came to a room mentioned in the legond

    "we better not cross the brige i think that it is going to fall if we use it" stated Tundra

    "then how are we going to get over to the other side?" said Spark

    "we cross here" Tundra said pointing at a small ledge

    "i'm not crossing that" said spark

    "then stay and freeze"

    "ok i'll come"

    With that over the three made there way over the ledge and made it to the otherside of the endless pit and got to the highest point of the Temple!

    "THERE IT IS" shouted Spark while running at towards a object sitting on a piller

    "NOOOOOO, SPARK GET BACK HERE USE A SHADOW CLONE" shouted Tundra

    "ok" said spark and he makes a close to get the object and throw it to tundra

    "good lets go before..."

    Befor Tundra could finsh what he was saying the ground started to shake and the piller and the area around it was sinking into the ground and something was coming from below

    "RUN, NOW" shouted tundra while a giant fronzen snake begain to come form the newly made hole

    the three run back into the room where the bridge was and they run across and Spark had been in the back and was starting to fall behind

    "hurry up spark" said Gust

    "i am" said spark

    But befor spark could do anything the bridge was starting to fall and spark was on the peace that was falling

    "NOOOOOOO" Shouted Gust

    "don't stop i don't wana lose both of you" said Tundra crying

    "we must return to the village to report what has happened" said Gust also crying

    So they returned to the village, though they as they cried, they noticed that the snow; that blinded them not long ago, has stopped.


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    Re: A New Beginning (Prolog - The Temple Of The Ice)

    Post by Koneko_Bozu8 on Sat Mar 01 2008, 19:53

    awesome ^-^
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    Re: A New Beginning (Prolog - The Temple Of The Ice)

    Post by Darkflame on Sat Mar 01 2008, 19:57

    i'll add part 2... 2marrow
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    Re: A New Beginning (Prolog - The Temple Of The Ice)

    Post by Koneko_Bozu8 on Sat Mar 01 2008, 20:26

    more plz Puppy Dog Eyes
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    Post by Darkflame on Sat Mar 01 2008, 20:27

    lol kone
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    Post by Koneko_Bozu8 on Sat Mar 01 2008, 20:43

    YAYZ!!! XD
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    Re: A New Beginning (Prolog - The Temple Of The Ice)

    Post by Darkflame on Sat Mar 01 2008, 20:44

    now i'll make u w8 till 2marrow
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    Re: A New Beginning (Prolog - The Temple Of The Ice)

    Post by Lil Kit Kat on Sat Mar 01 2008, 22:34

    Its good Flame, better than I could do.
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    Re: A New Beginning (Prolog - The Temple Of The Ice)

    Post by Darkflame on Sun Mar 02 2008, 10:02

    thanks kels i'm working on the next chapter

    -5 years later-
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    Re: A New Beginning (Prolog - The Temple Of The Ice)

    Post by KarateKeyaQ on Sun Mar 02 2008, 11:39

    0o00o0o
    I an interested!!
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    Re: A New Beginning (Prolog - The Temple Of The Ice)

    Post by Darkflame on Sun Mar 02 2008, 12:09

    i have chapter 1 done but i'm busy
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    Post by Destinykil on Sun Mar 02 2008, 12:42

    good
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    Re: A New Beginning (Prolog - The Temple Of The Ice)

    Post by Lil Kit Kat on Sun Mar 02 2008, 20:55

    darkflame5019 wrote:thanks kels i'm working on the next chapter

    -5 years later-
    XD
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    Re: A New Beginning (Prolog - The Temple Of The Ice)

    Post by Darkflame on Sun Mar 02 2008, 20:56

    Kitty Kat 1379 wrote:
    darkflame5019 wrote:thanks kels i'm working on the next chapter

    -5 years later-
    XD

    WHT???????????????????????????????????????? Dazed
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    Post by Lil Kit Kat on Sun Mar 02 2008, 21:02

    darkflame5019 wrote:
    Kitty Kat 1379 wrote:
    darkflame5019 wrote:thanks kels i'm working on the next chapter

    -5 years later-
    XD

    WHT???????????????????????????????????????? Dazed
    Nothing it was your last comment...
    Anyways, it good, and a little cruel that you would kill off a character in the first chapter...
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    Re: A New Beginning (Prolog - The Temple Of The Ice)

    Post by Darkflame on Sun Mar 02 2008, 21:03

    Kitty Kat 1379 wrote:
    darkflame5019 wrote:
    Kitty Kat 1379 wrote:
    darkflame5019 wrote:thanks kels i'm working on the next chapter

    -5 years later-
    XD

    WHT???????????????????????????????????????? Dazed
    Nothing it was your last comment...
    Anyways, it good, and a little cruel that you would kill off a character in the first chapter...

    lol thanks and if u want i can PM u a spoiler
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    Re: A New Beginning (Prolog - The Temple Of The Ice)

    Post by sabaku no ketsueki on Wed Mar 05 2008, 21:19

    finally! i read it!
    ok, here's my comments:

    well, the story was pretty good plot wise, but commas, people, COMMAS! The grammar could have been better, but i'm a stickler for these things. Overall, I'd say it was ok, but the next few chapters will determine the rest
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    Post by Darkflame on Wed Mar 05 2008, 21:20

    the next one as i told u is short
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    Post by Laura-Chan on Thu Mar 06 2008, 15:20

    Found it!!
    wow. that. was. Awesome. I liked it loads.
    Too bad about spark dying...
    Great! i've read the next chapter too! ^_^
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    Post by KarateKeyaQ on Thu May 15 2008, 17:50

    XD
    I DID read the prologue!
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    Re: A New Beginning (Prolog - The Temple Of The Ice)

    Post by Darkflame on Thu May 15 2008, 19:54

    ok lol and laura it is up to chapter 5

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